Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page?

Posted by petervandijck on Monday June 13, 2011 @01:41PM
from the ask-hn dept.

http://getgush.com/ In particular I'd love to hear feedback on the wording. Are you seeing some kind of value you'd like to sign up for? What do you think the product could be?

Much appreciated!

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by DanielStraight on Monday June 13, 2011 @02:04PM (#2650011)

Inconsistent tenses. "We will store" but then "we are doing." Last sentence should read, "and we will do it for free." This isn't just to be pedantic. Consistency in grammatical form creates symmetry which improves the impact of your writing.

I would also consider striking "we believe" from the text. As I'm sure you've heard, if you didn't believe it, you wouldn't have written it.

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by petervandijck on Monday June 13, 2011 @02:17PM (#2650065)

Edited.

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by maxdemarzi on Monday June 13, 2011 @04:51PM (#2650637)

Copywriting is hard.

Instead of :

"Your photos are your memories; you should never lose them. We store every photo you have ever taken. And we do it free."

How about:

"Your photos are your memories, don't lose them. Let us safeguard every photo you have ever taken completely free."

"Your photos are your memories, don't lose them. Let us safeguard your photos completely free."

"Your photos are your memories, don't lose them. Let us safeguard your memories completely free."

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by latch on Tuesday June 14, 2011 @04:20AM (#2652233)

Unless you are targeting a very narrow audience, I gotta believe the UTF cloud character is a huge mistake. In fact, I'm not even sure I'd use the word "cloud" for, what I suspect, is your audience. My mom won't understand "cloud" (let alone a picture of something weird)...but she'll understand "online". Of course, if you are targeting VCs...

I'm no designer, but something seems wrong with the typography, Logo aside, I see 3 setences with 3 different fonts. I find the last 2 hard to read. "Your photos are your memories" is too dark against the background and "we're not yet live" is small and messed up (I'll check tonight in a real OS).

As for what I think it could be? Flickr.

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by DanielStraight on Tuesday June 14, 2011 @08:34AM (#2652703)

On my computer, that character is just a little dot basically... I thought it was a bug at first.

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by latch on Tuesday June 14, 2011 @09:51AM (#2652928)

it looks totally different at home. 100% looks more like a cloud. 100% still think that's silly.

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by petervandijck on Monday June 13, 2011 @01:43PM (#2649905)

Clickable http://getgush.com/

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by pbreit on Monday June 13, 2011 @01:55PM (#2649965)

Seems compelling except that I'm wondering how easy it is going to be for the customer.

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by petervandijck on Monday June 13, 2011 @02:15PM (#2650058)

Very easy, but the proof of that will be in the proverbial pudding :)

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Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page? by caleb on Monday June 20, 2011 @07:56AM (#2673766)

Couple of ideas:

Change "loose" to "lose" (typo).

Instead of saying "Gush puts..." consider wording such as "Share your photos and access your work online."

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