Re:Ask HN: Feedback on our landing page?
by DanielStraight on Monday June 13, 2011 @02:04PM
(#2650011)
Inconsistent tenses. "We will store" but then "we are doing." Last sentence should read, "and we will do it for free." This isn't just to be pedantic. Consistency in grammatical form creates symmetry which improves the impact of your writing.
I would also consider striking "we believe" from the text. As I'm sure you've heard, if you didn't believe it, you wouldn't have written it.
I would also consider striking "we believe" from the text. As I'm sure you've heard, if you didn't believe it, you wouldn't have written it.