There are a couple of stylistic choices you might want to consider as well. You've got quite a few run on sentences. And most writers use "word processors" not "text editors" (assuming you're going for the average writer, not the HN crowd).
(Just trying to be helpful, please don't take this as criticism. Congrats on your launch!)
[EDIT] - Two more things:
- "Heyy" in the page title
- "we know you'll love [IndiePaper]" might be better than "it". Getting your project's name to stick in heads is probably easier with more mentions
Professional author here. It's a major, eye-rolling turn-off to see the grammar and punctuation errors, and to be honest, the breezy response is also a turn-off and screams amateurish effort.
If you are posting this on HN, accepting users, and (presumably) taking payments, then you have already publicly launched, and you should have done this already.
I understand that it's a side project, but if you want to have people take your business seriously -- and a business marketing to writers, of all people -- then you've got to make sure your homepage copy is beyond reproach.
> If you are posting this on HN, accepting users, and (presumably) taking payments, then you have already publicly launched, and you should have done this already.
This seems like an overly stringent requirement for Show HNs. The guidelines say no such thing[0], and in fact they say the opposite:
> A Show HN needn't be complicated or look slick. The community is comfortable with work that's at an early stage.
I thought what drew people to HN in part was the ability to see fun and possibly unfinished/amateur but interesting and thought provoking content.
But what about meeting all three of the conditions I laid out in the sentence you quoted: (1) marketing the site to the public, (2) accepting users, and (3) taking payments.
Arguably, at that point, you have veered out of hobby project territory and have publicly launched a business -- and that's where my criticism lies.