That deck is really pretty but I'm really curious whether investors would spend their time going through so much text. Here is a pitch deck that buffer used.

http://www.slideshare.net/Bufferapp/buffer-seedrounddeck

I felt I needed to tell a richer story about what we were trying to achieve, mainly because we were created an entirely new market. I couldn't point to another company and say "we're like them, but 10x better." I didn't exactly have market numbers to use as a method of framing the investment potential. I felt

I needed to paint a picture about a future we were trying to create... but you may very well be correct.

I'm with you on having a narrative and conveying the drive. Did you find that some investors understood that and made decisions based on it or was it that you found them to be speaking a different language?

Btw, I respect the effort and thought that went into analyzing the reasons for failure and the courage required to be open about it. Hope things work out in your next attempt.

When I was reading through it I was thinking way too much text.

Really well designed but they really neglected to talk about their business model.

I mean I would have loved to have known how much their 'OneWatt' breadboard cost to manufacture and what they were planning on selling it for.

That being said I loved their slide on 'HOW BIG IS THE MARKET?'.

It's a nice slide deck. It doesn't appear to be a pitch deck.

Can you (or someone else) provide a mirror? The public Dropbox links are no longer functional due to generating too much traffic...

It's on Google Drive now.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B95cJ2uw4oQlSm5rSTEwU0NZLUk...

It must have been- dropbox blocked the file for drawing too much traffic. :-/