Take me to Silicon Valley: 19 year old designer seeking opportunity

Re:Take me to Silicon Valley: 19 year old designer seeking o... by aaront on Friday January 06, 2012 @06:05PM (#3435482)

Looks great, just a few little things:

* "I am Filip Santa, 19 years old designer from Slovakia" sounds a little strange. Maybe something like "I am Filip Santa, a 19 year old designer from Slovakia"

* In your timeline, instead of "Learning what is layer", maybe "Learning about layers"

* Also in the timeline: "Trying first webs & posters", maybe "Designing first web sites & posters"

And, here's my OCD peeking through, the images seem to have a colour profile associated with them, which clashes with mine producing: http://i.imgur.com/6BV6o.png (try making the background transparent)

Best of luck!

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Re:Take me to Silicon Valley: 19 year old designer seeking o... by wyclif on Friday January 06, 2012 @09:17PM (#3435961)

Filip: You need to rewrite the copy; some of the English is severely broken and you are using hyphens where there shouldn't be any.

If you need help, email me and I'll help you as much as I can (I'm an English Lit. major and native speaker).

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Re:Take me to Silicon Valley: 19 year old designer seeking o... by kylelibra on Friday January 06, 2012 @06:10PM (#3435497)

It bugged me as well, but I assumed English wasn't his first language, so it is forgivable in my book.

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Re:Take me to Silicon Valley: 19 year old designer seeking o... by FilipSanta on Saturday January 07, 2012 @12:10AM (#3436261)

sorry, it's been already years since I've returned from US, so English may not be perfect

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Re:Take me to Silicon Valley: 19 year old designer seeking o... by xarien on Friday January 06, 2012 @06:44PM (#3435583)

When I read that first bullet, my first thought was of Borat. Pop culture wins again...!!!

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