Re:Minimal English (2018)
by wolverine876 on Sunday February 27, 2022 @04:45AM
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Example:
>> "Please," Paul whimpered, "I don't want a fight."
> VS
>> "Please," Paul said, burying his shaking hands in his pockets, "I don't want a fight."
> The second sentence is better ...
Many of the same writers would say that "burying his shaking hands in his pockets" should also be omitted, and Paul's words and the context should convey it all. But few would say one style is objectively 'better', I think.
>> "Please," Paul whimpered, "I don't want a fight."
> VS
>> "Please," Paul said, burying his shaking hands in his pockets, "I don't want a fight."
> The second sentence is better ...
Many of the same writers would say that "burying his shaking hands in his pockets" should also be omitted, and Paul's words and the context should convey it all. But few would say one style is objectively 'better', I think.