Re:EVERY ONE I need your honest opinion
by flavmartins on Monday September 09, 2013 @03:50PM
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A few items:
1) Lose the iPhone 3g picture. You need to be up to date on that. It should be an iPhone 5 or newer Android smartphone.
2) Lots of little grammar issues:
- "Providing Realtime Advertising Data by Analyzing Pictures, in a blink of an eye"
You're switching between capitalizing the headline and then not at the end -- should be either:
Providing Realtime Advertising Data by Analyzing Pictures, In the Blink of an Eye
Or
Providing real-time advertising data by analyzing pictures in the blink of an eye.
-"Many companies pay alot of money" vs. "Many companies pay a lot of money". Although, I would change this to say something like, budgets for mobile advertisement are expected to grow X% over the next 2 years. Or something like that. The current statement comes off as "I've heard that some people spend a lot of money, so we're planning on selling things to them." It sounds like a rookie.
-"Many companies loose alot of valuable customers" vs. "Many companies lose a lot of valuable customers". Even here I would stick to X% of customers are lost because...
-And thats where PictAlyze. Should be "that's where PictAlyze"
3) Site organization could use some work. It would look much better if you stuck with 2 columns and rotated between a picture and a section of text opposite the picture on the column next to the image.
1) Lose the iPhone 3g picture. You need to be up to date on that. It should be an iPhone 5 or newer Android smartphone.
2) Lots of little grammar issues:
- "Providing Realtime Advertising Data by Analyzing Pictures, in a blink of an eye"
You're switching between capitalizing the headline and then not at the end -- should be either:
Providing Realtime Advertising Data by Analyzing Pictures, In the Blink of an Eye
Or
Providing real-time advertising data by analyzing pictures in the blink of an eye.
-"Many companies pay alot of money" vs. "Many companies pay a lot of money". Although, I would change this to say something like, budgets for mobile advertisement are expected to grow X% over the next 2 years. Or something like that. The current statement comes off as "I've heard that some people spend a lot of money, so we're planning on selling things to them." It sounds like a rookie.
-"Many companies loose alot of valuable customers" vs. "Many companies lose a lot of valuable customers". Even here I would stick to X% of customers are lost because...
-And thats where PictAlyze. Should be "that's where PictAlyze"
3) Site organization could use some work. It would look much better if you stuck with 2 columns and rotated between a picture and a section of text opposite the picture on the column next to the image.