This is pretty straightforward. I'm intrigued, but question how someone else (who has not thought about the problem as long as I have) be able to communicate the solution more effectively than me? Further, you don't guarantee anything if I think your pitch sucks. It feels like I might just blow $25 for entertainment and hope for the best.

Maybe re-position your value prop like so: "For $25, we'll consult with you for 30 minutes to help you refine your existing pitch or create one from scratch."

You can still earn your keep but allows your customers to be involved in shaping a pitch that actually reflects their vision.

Thanks for the feedback. That's actually the exact problem I've been having with my first customers. I end up consulting with them via email (until the pitch is perfect) anyway, so I might as well build the site around it. A 30-minute consultation is a great idea too.

Thanks again.