Re:“How Americans edit sex out of my writing”
by treis on Thursday October 06, 2022 @02:42PM
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Ah okay. IMHO the editors suggestion is way better. It's more impactful and to the point instead of diverging for a sentence about sad drunken nights:
>We used to do it without video, but last March we started feeling the need to be visible to one another. The need to be seen and acknowledged by people you respect.
>We used to do it without video, but last March we started feeling the need to be visible to one another. There were mornings following marriage blackout nights where you only wanted to be seen and acknowledged by people you respect.
The author explains a few lines after:
> In my version, that writer is also in his underwear, and the reader is informed that the couple is having some sad, drunken nights (« marriage blackout nights » doesn’t sound right and would have needed editing anyway, but bear with me). These are two expressions of, well, vulnerability.