Reads like a pretty decent outline. It's a sufficiently interesting premise for a story. But no named characters or even characters at all seems like a shortcoming. Understandable, as I don't believe GPT-3 is anywhere close to being able to create consistent, believable fictional people and relationships that can exist across paragraphs just yet, but I'm sure some future version will get there eventually.

That is, of course, the hardest part for human authors as well.