Re:Ask YC: Feedback on our startup/application
by netcan on Sunday October 05, 2008 @11:49PM
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1. The one liner
What is your exact meaning?
I suggest forgetting about marketability, memorability, etc. of the wording, and trying to continue this conversation with a long time ebayer:
Onista is an auction-less social marketplace where people can buy and sell products."
"Huh?"
Use as many sentences as you need. Work out the meaning, then get it into a zinger. If you can't well then find another way of communicating that. Not everything fits into a one-liner. There are other ways of saying things. Start by working out what it is people need to understand before giving it a try.
2. the terminology
Social marketplace I think that's industry jargon. Do users use the term social to describe things (social news, social networking, social bookmarking?)
I suggest forgetting about marketability, memorability, etc. of the wording, and trying to continue this conversation with a long time ebayer:
Onista is an auction-less social marketplace where people can buy and sell products."
"Huh?"
Use as many sentences as you need. Work out the meaning, then get it into a zinger. If you can't well then find another way of communicating that. Not everything fits into a one-liner. There are other ways of saying things. Start by working out what it is people need to understand before giving it a try.
Social marketplace I think that's industry jargon. Do users use the term social to describe things (social news, social networking, social bookmarking?)