Re:Suggestions on Releasing my startup
by petervandijck on Tuesday March 15, 2011 @07:46AM
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Agreed with the writing. You're clearly not a native speaker, and that's ok, for coding. But the writing on the site is terrible and a turn-off. If you can't find someone to dramatically improve it, then remove it.
If you're serious about this, there are services out there that improve your writing. Or ask for free help.
You should spend at least a week fulltime just on improving the writing.
Re:Suggestions on Releasing my startup
by JordanCharters on Sunday March 13, 2011 @03:07PM
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Thank you for the feedback. I completely understand your judgment on the grammar and I'll try to improve it.
Also I agree the "Share Photos - Be Creative - Be Inspired!" doesn't tell you much so I'll see what else I can come up with.
Thanks again and I hope you come back again soon when the sites open :)
Even "Where's Your Duck Been" doesn't look grammatical.
It's short for "Where has your duck been?" There's nothing grammatically wrong about that.
On the other hand, "doesn't look grammatical" is not exactly the Queen's English.
You can start by improving spelling and grammar. Both the website and this message has jarring grammatical errors. Even "Where's Your Duck Been" doesn't look grammatical.
After that you can work on your messaging. "Share Photos - Be Creative - Be Inspired!" - the only information in that slogan that says anything is "share photos".
You should better explain how your website is different than any other photo sharing website. "community of members following an idea worldwide" is nonsensical as is pretty much the rest of the copy on the website. Your blog posts aren't much better either.
With such a terrible level of writing don't expect to be taken seriously by anyone.