Re:The Bulwer Lytton Fiction Contest: 2019 Winners
by nerdponx on Thursday November 21, 2019 @02:34AM
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"It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents. At times it was checked by a violent gust of wind which swept up the streets -- for it is in London that our scene lies -- rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness."
I'm not a professional writer but I personally like this rephrasing.
Re:The Bulwer Lytton Fiction Contest: 2019 Winners
by Applejinx on Thursday November 21, 2019 @08:02AM
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You could do 'swept up the London streets' quite easily, which saves an authorial interjection that's part of the whole Bulwer-Lytton vibe.
Re:The Bulwer Lytton Fiction Contest: 2019 Winners
by TheOtherHobbes on Thursday November 21, 2019 @04:22AM
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In a Kindle novel it would be:
London. Thunder. Rain.
Re:The Bulwer Lytton Fiction Contest: 2019 Winners
by dmitriid on Thursday November 21, 2019 @11:27AM
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Alexander Blok (Russian poet)
A direct translation:
Night, street, lamp, drugstore, A dull and meaningless light. Go on and live another quarter century - Nothing will change. There's no way out.
You'll die, then start from the beginning, It will repeat, just like before: Night, icy ripples on a canal, Drugstore, street, lamp.
More attempts here: https://ruverses.com/alexander-blok/night-street-lamp-drugst...
> It was a dark and stormy night.
or even
> It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents.
are actually excellent. I like the rest of it as well. It just shouldn't be a single sentence.