> listen a little more attentive
attentively
> will sharpen you in daily English
"sharpen" should be applied to the skill, not the person? ("sharpen your daily English")
> Becoming fluent becomes after becoming familiar.
"becomes after" sounds weird. Maybe "follows" or "comes".
> very clearly speaking guy
clear speaking
But I think the most glaring issue is the way you use commas (lots of unnecessary commas, comma splices, and parallel structure violations).
All of this is beyond grammar nazi-ing since some of these are just word choices that I would've made differently rather than grammatical errors. Again, I am also non-native.
Possibly depends on the dialect. "Sharpen your skills" is probably more common, but applying it to the person (e.g. "This will sharpen you up") sounds fine to me as a British English speaker (though if specifying a specific skill in the same sentence you probably wouldn't use that form).
> But I think the most glaring issue is the way you use commas (lots of unnecessary commas, comma splices, and parallel structure violations).
Definitely true, but that can also be a trait of some native speakers, FWIW. Some of my sentences have a ton of unneeded commas and "loose" clauses when I first write them, until I refactor them to make them more correct. It's certainly not exclusive to non-native speakers.
Most of the commas I use (before the "and" & "or"s) are Oxford Commas which dictates to use a comma before the conjunction if the sentences are separable. If the sentences are separable you don't use the comma. A more general rule is explained in [0].
My juries of my Master's and Ph.D. were very strict in this manner so I learned it the hard way. Now it's hardwired in my brain. Honestly I may be over using them, and will write more carefully.
[0] https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/30516/should-i-u...
You seem to be confusing the Oxford (or serial) comma [0] used after the penultimate item of a list with the rule on comma + conjunction (or semicolon with no conjunction) separating independent clauses as opposed to a bare conjunction separating dependent clauses.
Thanks for clarifying these up. Will keep these in mind too.
However, this is not to dismiss your comment as moot or anything, I'll keep this in mind. Thanks for the heads up.