An interesting counter-point, but rather poorly written, and far too short. You need to flesh your ideas and accusations out properly, and your ending line makes for a lazy and frankly rather pathetic conclusion. You should invest a lot more time into editing and review.

Doesn't matter if it is long or short, as long as people understand it.

It matters if you're actually formulating an argument. I understand what you are saying and am unmoved. Preaching to your choir is amateurish.

Very provocative!