It's a cool enough remix, and the beginning was different from ones I've heard before. The problem is that I feel that the eeriness of the original comes from the minimalism. Any sorts of drums or orchestra or choir sounds take away from it. Maybe the only improvement could be more modern synth sounds? That's just my feel on it, maybe I'll hear a counterexample some day.
> I feel that the eeriness of the original comes from the minimalism.
Yeah, I definitely agree with you here. The minimalism of the original creates a great feeling of isolation, which I clearly didn't re-create in the remix.
(BTW I found the same feeling of minimalism-conveyed-isolation to be present in "Maridia 2" music of Super Metroid - same problem here, orchestration make it disappear)
Anyway, thanks for listening! It's probable that the original can't be enhanced :-)
Trying my luck: https://soundcloud.com/ace17-1/industroid-r3