Re:Ask HN: UX feedback on a website I made
by DrScump on Tuesday January 19, 2016 @09:41PM
(#10935729)
I would move the large text off the building (or choose another color) for readability. Maybe italicize authentic for emphasis.
Maybe a different color for the smaller text.
"An ancient typical farmhouse with panoramic pool on the hills of Tuscany" sounds a bit awkward to me.
I would reword as "A(n) historic Tuscany farmhouse with modern conveniences" (assuming there are any besides the pool, otherwise "outdoor pool" or open-air pool or whatever)
"Boschi di Montecalvi" I would put in a different font or color for emphasis... if there is a page with underlying history that is public, make it a link.
I would say instead: "Boschi di Montecalvi is set in the beautiful hills of Tuscany, near the small medieval town of Suvereto. (perhaps a link for Suvereto?)
The estate features a swimming pool with breathtaking views and is surrounded by a 100-hectare(?) park.
Accomodations include XXX rooms (what kind of rooms? how do they differ from the apartments?), apartments, and a fine restaurant with typical Tuscan dishes. (and local wines, maybe?)
"Real food, real wine..." capitalize Tuscany (always, for English version) and lose the "a" and the comma:
"Come enjoy traditional Tuscan cuisine featuring local dishes and organic produce."
"How to get here" I would change to "Planning your visit"
"A farmhouse in Tuscany for children" / A farmhouse in Tuscany near the seaside / Last minute farmhouse in Tuscany
Maybe instead:
A welcoming locale for the whole family / Near the Tyrrhenian coast / Short-notice visitors welcome
Re:Ask HN: UX feedback on a website I made
by DrScump on Wednesday January 20, 2016 @06:43PM
(#10942323)
the important thing is to get the content you want... we native speakers can help you with presentation, but you are the one who knows the attractions of your place and what makes it special.
Maybe a different color for the smaller text.
"An ancient typical farmhouse with panoramic pool on the hills of Tuscany" sounds a bit awkward to me. I would reword as "A(n) historic Tuscany farmhouse with modern conveniences" (assuming there are any besides the pool, otherwise "outdoor pool" or open-air pool or whatever)
"Boschi di Montecalvi" I would put in a different font or color for emphasis... if there is a page with underlying history that is public, make it a link.
I would say instead: "Boschi di Montecalvi is set in the beautiful hills of Tuscany, near the small medieval town of Suvereto. (perhaps a link for Suvereto?) The estate features a swimming pool with breathtaking views and is surrounded by a 100-hectare(?) park. Accomodations include XXX rooms (what kind of rooms? how do they differ from the apartments?), apartments, and a fine restaurant with typical Tuscan dishes. (and local wines, maybe?)
"Real food, real wine..." capitalize Tuscany (always, for English version) and lose the "a" and the comma: "Come enjoy traditional Tuscan cuisine featuring local dishes and organic produce."
"How to get here" I would change to "Planning your visit"
"A farmhouse in Tuscany for children" / A farmhouse in Tuscany near the seaside / Last minute farmhouse in Tuscany
Maybe instead:
A welcoming locale for the whole family / Near the Tyrrhenian coast / Short-notice visitors welcome