lisefromcaptiz

This is really cool!

A little story-telling + 'help' section would be great to onboard new players.

A share button, for twitter + facebook where with a description (where the cool story-telling could play a part).

Will assume you refer to pitching / sales conversation.

The worst you can do in sales is talk a lot (a good rule is talking 20% of the time, maximum).

I'd recommend: - writing down the types of customers you might have (user personae) - capturing the value you offer to each segment in 1 sentence.

Let's take Facebook example: For users: Connect 24/7 with your friends For businesses: Sell products to your target in a clic! For game developers: Push your apps to the biggest pool of players. For media: Your content introduced to up to 1.7 billion people worldwide... For investors: Get great ROI on a growing product the whole world is using.

A first conversation should spark interest. Then, you can ask questions and go on to features / details.

It's very hard to be concise, you might fear leaving some advantages of your product out, and it takes a lot of work and market feedback to make a short pitch right ...

I hope this helps :)