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It's damn hard to pull emotion out when writing about one's life story, but Greenspan's writing style so distracts from the meat of his story that it's frustrating.

For instance:

"both so-called Facebook veterans (a phrase that actual veterans might find laughable)"

or

"It was an expense I simply could not afford all over again (unlike the Winklevoss twins, my father did not have millions of dollars of disposable income)"

or

"[Mark] didn't understand how to speak like a mature person his age."

Bits like those just scream "I'm a vicitim" and come off as whiny.

If Greenspan laid out the timeline and the documentation sans his editorializing it would be more powerful.

Carry these same points through any follow-up interviews, testimony, etc and I sense that Greenspan would be much happier with his outcome.