interesting feedback, thanks - it was mostly a stream of consciousness written in a single three hour sitting with no editing. would appreciate more detail. I'm actually gratefully surprised you found my writing so skimmable, not something I optimize for

Yeah, your ideas came across quickly but as you mentioned there was a "stream of consciousness" after and seemed to reduce in value the more it continued.

Like my English professor would always bark: "just say it." Which meant you should avoid all unnecessary words..almost to the point of leaving some things out.